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Road Trip Conversations by *betceemay:iconbetceemay:

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I want to go sailing
on that wispy blue cloud rolling in
San Francisco fog dressed me that creamy day
of milkweed pod moments, green waters and yellow balloon skies
Trucks of tomatoes and bouncing garlic
shaking in its paper skins roll by
We should be in Italy I say soft
I'm dreaming of sounds of basil
slipping through my fingertips
handsome men in black and white stripes
and sweat pulsing on shiny midnight brows
oars slicing water
Your hand glides up my thigh
We pass homes with lights on
lines of laundry strung tight
taking in morning breezes
letting out last night's secrets
I whisper a big one
Sage gusts blow my mystery to the sea
The road boasts it's steady gray
and we drive on
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From the passenger seat as produce trucks pass by and leave me hungry...

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:iconabazou:
~abazou Aug 26, 2007, 10:46:05 PM
As i said
write more ;)

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sacrifice what you are for what you could become
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*betceemay Aug 26, 2007, 10:59:53 PM
I will certainly try... I will admit I am intimidated. I have never shared my writings (and paintings to come) publicly...

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Close your eyes to see...
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*photoscot Aug 27, 2007, 12:21:54 AM
Wonderful Betcee! I felt i was there beside you. Beautifiul imagery and softly sensual feeling. Wonderful rhythm to your lines!

I've always known you could write! You have no reason to be intimidated! It's wonderful to see you let others in on the secret. Now all we need is to see some of your paintings and photography!

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“If there hadn't been women we'd still be squatting in a cave eating raw meat, because we made civilization in order to impress our girlfriends.” ~Orson Welles~

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~Bellevue-DarkKnight Aug 27, 2007, 1:36:19 AM
this is very lovely work!

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See the Rivers get a dell, and watch out for Tactus </
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~Magoichi Aug 27, 2007, 1:54:54 AM
reminds me of a road trip memory on the west coast Washington to California.

I have a hard time myself posting some of my poetry, a self conscience thing I think!

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"When I order you to release your power, you will open every fon slot in your body and unleashed a hyperresonance!"

Tales of the Abyss
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Mood: Exhilarated ~KennethSnow Aug 27, 2007, 2:51:41 AM
Very nice...not only are you a beautiful sight you possess a beautiful write. Keep the poetry coming.

:snowflake: kenneth
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~hegira2006 Aug 27, 2007, 10:24:40 AM
the true work of an artist! when i first read it i also felt as if i were right there, able to see all the details first hand. magnificent form, the words just drip in vividness! can't wait to see more of your poetry.
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~Dseter Aug 27, 2007, 10:37:52 AM
Yes, it's really wonderful- took me away for a moment to another place and time in the past where I could free my mind and feel the wind in my hair and the sweet smell of Montana Pine Tree Forests. More! More!

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Work-Related Anal Glaucoma- When you can't see your ass going to work today...
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~diabolic-r00t Aug 30, 2007, 9:14:58 AM
All in all, it's hard to beat a good tomato sandwich. :nod: I like how your words took me there. I could almost hear the trucks :)
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